tweaks

In rereading my episode after taking some time off from it and comparing my two peer reviews I think I have a better grasp on where I would like to take the episode.

The two things I think I need to work on the most are including more personal narrative and re-writing my first sentence to make it more lucrative and catchy. I think one of the main necessities of the history engine article is a first sentence that will make the reader stop and click on my episode. Will also suggested that I use more military jargon in my episode, so that might be another area that bears researching.

I think the Shaara book "Killer Angels" is definitely worth perusing again in thinking about my episode; both for more insight and information but also as a guide to interesting as well as informative history writing.